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TOPIC: Today family members eat fewer meals together. Why is this? Is this a positive a negative trend?

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Under intolerable social pressure, members of a family are being driven away from one another, and cosy
meals
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 spent together have been left behind as a nostalgic memory.
This
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profound remorse. The divide in personal schedules among
parents
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 and
children
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 is allegedly the culprit of the distressful degradation of
home-meal
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the home-meal
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 tradition. It is common knowledge that a typical workday in the past was longer than that in the present
time
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;
nonetheless
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, it would definitely end at six in the afternoon, unlike its present counterpart. To be specific, today’s workers are regularly supposed to cope with a massive load of jobs, which causes their workday
linger
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 after six and even cut into
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dinner
time
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. Apart from employed adults,
children
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 are conventionally coerced to dedicate most of their own
time
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 to official studies, especially those who live in developing countries where cut-throat education systems dominate.
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, they scarcely enjoy dinner together when
parents
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 go home too late, and
children
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 may have to dine earlier in order for them to join late-night classes. The death of home
meals
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 will be a fatal blow to the native culture and social stability. In
history
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 of tongues and customs,
family
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the family
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 meal is formally regarded as the cradle of behavioural norms which fundamentally form the basis of all
culture
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 activities, the hierarchy of the community and national beliefs.
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, dinner is the sole moment of the day when
parents
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 and kids can converse on their own troubles as well as applauded doings
,
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 or most of the
time
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 on funny stories they stumble on a day. In the absence of family
meals
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,
parents
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 would have no inkling of what their
children
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 are temporarily faced up with, so they are unable to intervene in the
kids
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kid's
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 problems opportunely. With no solutions, sooner or later will these formidable issues evolve into
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irrevocable flaws in culture and society. In conclusion, the current trend of skipping family
meals
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 is an unwished-for by-product of the industry,
hectic
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and hectic
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 lifestyle led by human beings since it is ruining cultural legacy and social well-being.

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