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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Recently, there have been arguments that the
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valuable
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valuable
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bachelor
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 degree from a university will be better
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getting
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sophisticated
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sophisticated
 and educated. Some people complain that
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 to get a job
straighted
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straight
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 should be getting experience
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altered
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, I believe that
student
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students
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get
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 a higher education will
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influence
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influence
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salary
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 when they started a job.
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 with, in terms of going to university has
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 advantages for the
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students
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 future life. As a reality, there
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the
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salary
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 gap when compared
people
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 who graduated higher educations and graduated
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high
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hight
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high
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schools
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, in present society,
undergraduated
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undergraduate
students
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 get more high
salary
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 than others.
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, as for the
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of
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 the person. In my country, the
students
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 who have
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undergraduate
undergraduated
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undergraduate
 qualifications'
salary
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 will be around 20 dollars per month which
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 around 5 dollars
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. For
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long-term
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long-terms
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, the few
salary
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biggest
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the biggest
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 differences. Thinking
for
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are
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 better than just
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focus
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now
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 situations. In conclusion,
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apply
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students
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 who
getting
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 higher education
qualification
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qualifications
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 should be one of the
merit
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merits
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 for future
salary
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 compare with
students
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did
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who did
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 not go to universities.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • specialized fields
  • job prospects
  • earning potential
  • formal education
  • networking opportunities
  • career advancement
  • practical skills
  • work environment
  • financial independence
  • high costs
  • skills and experience
  • formal education
  • prioritize
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