Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Recently, there have been arguments that the
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degree from a university will be better
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getting
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and educated. Some people complain that
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to get a job
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, I believe that
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a higher education will
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advantages for the
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future life. As a reality, there
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gap when compared
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who graduated higher educations and graduated
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, in present society,
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get more high
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the person. In my country, the
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qualifications'
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around 5 dollars
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. For
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, the few
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differences. Thinking
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better than just
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focus
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situations. In conclusion,
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higher education
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should be one of the
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for future
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not go to universities.
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