Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way. Do you agree or disagree?
It is hard to deny that physical
punishment
still happen
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happens
everyday
in many countries even Replace the word
every day
it
is certainly illegal which Correct word choice
though it
rise
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raise
lots
of attention from a large proportion of people to Fix the agreement mistake
lot
this
topic,and there still have some Correct your spelling
people
poeple
who think that they have the Correct your spelling
people
right
to punish their children
. From my perspection
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perspective
i
hold a strong point that Change the capitalization
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children
should be treat
in Change the verb form
be treated
correct
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the correct
a correct
way
without physical punishment
which should be deep in everyone's mind and behavior
since it Change the spelling
behaviour
is relate
to the future of the Change the verb form
is related
country
.
On the one hand , physical punishment
would have strong
bad influence Add an article
a strong
in
the Change preposition
on
hamorny
of a Correct your spelling
harmony
country
. To be more specific, the kids who have been treat
badly when they were kids would more likely Change the verb form
treating
treated
suffering
mental health Change the verb form
suffer
be suffering
issue
as they could not run away from Fix the agreement mistake
issues
punishment
when they were young, they would have deep
fear of making mistakes which means being punished in their recognition and unable to be good to themselves or others. What is more , they would unable to make a living while a company would not hire a person who can not face Add an article
a deep
with
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apply
the
problems or get along with others normally . In the end , the individuals Correct article usage
apply
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undoubtedly
undoubtly
would grow up and become a Correct your spelling
undoubtedly
uselss
man to society and lower Correct your spelling
useless
the
productivity and Correct article usage
apply
finally
have badlly
impact Correct your spelling
badly
bad
for
the economy of the whole Change preposition
on
country
.
On the other hand
, Punish
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Punishing
children
is
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in
a
wrong Correct article usage
the
way
which means it could lead to a wrong way
for
making Change preposition
of
children
realise the truth so that they would keep making the same Correct your spelling
mistake
mistale
in the future .Correct your spelling
mistakes
for example
. If a child have
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has
make
some mistakes and Change the verb form
made
being
punished in his childhood, it would be hard to distinguish if they realise they did something wrong or they are just trying to Wrong verb form
is
be
avoid being punished. All they would do Unnecessary verb
apply
mabe
just avoid being punished Correct your spelling
was
instead
of knowing why they
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their
behaviors
are wrong. so if you let Change the spelling
behaviours
children
stay away from the fire otherwise
they would be punished , children
would not been
realise to stay away from other Unnecessary verb
apply
danger
, Fix the agreement mistake
dangers
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such
sush
as electricity. Correct your spelling
such
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would be an adult no matter what Add an article
The kid
A kid
happen
, and they have to Change the verb form
happens
acknowlege
.Correct your spelling
acknowledge
this
world on their own which could help them live this
word
better.
In conclusion , I totally disagree with the point that Correct your spelling
world
the
parent Correct article usage
apply
have
the Change the verb form
has
right
to punish their own children
. kids keeper
would surely have the Fix the agreement mistake
keepers
right
to educate their children
in a
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the
right
way
, but we all know that punishment
would be harmful to both of
mental and the body health which means that would Change preposition
apply
be
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apply
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effective
effect
the Correct your spelling
affect
right
of the children
while country
should Add an article
the country
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guarantee
garantee
the youth Correct your spelling
guarantee
basical
safety. Actually, Correct your spelling
basic
provide
a suitable and healthy environment is the responsibility Wrong verb form
providing
to
all of Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
human
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humans
. .
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.
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