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Show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The diagrams show information about the
town
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 of
Islip
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 and its future
development
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 plan. What stands out from the maps is that the
town
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 of
Islip
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 will be turned into a modern
town
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 after the
development
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. Currently, the
town
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 is small and poorly developed. The main
road
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 is passed through the middle of the
town
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 and shops are built on both sides of that
road
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. Park is located at the southeast end of the
town
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. In the southwest corner of the
town
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, there is a school and the link
road
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 connects it with the
town
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. At the north end of
Islip
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town
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 behind the shops, vast land is allocated to the countryside. If we take a look into the future
development
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 plans of
Islip
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town
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then
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 more buildings and housing are there.
First
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 of all, the main
road
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 is knocked out and it is converted to a ring
road
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. Almost all the main buildings of the
town
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 are inside that ring
road
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. The main
road
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 is
also
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 upgraded to a dual carriageway. At the place of the main
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, a new pedestrian pathway will be built. At the south end of the pedestrian way, there will be shops and on the west side, a whole new set of buildings will be built that includes a bus station, shopping centre, car park and housing. The school will be in the same place as before but the new housing will be built opposite the school on the other side of the dual carriageway. All and all after
development
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 the
town
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 of
Islip
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 will be the most modern
town
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 with state-of-the-art facilities for residents.

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