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Writing Samples
Band 4

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People learn things better from those at their own level—such as fellow students or co-workers—than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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 point I would like to make is that
people
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level
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 than us, specially
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professors
proffesors
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professors
, have more knowledge than
population
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the population
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 at the same academic
level
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like
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 our classmates. So, the information teachers share
to
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with
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 their students is more accurate and is delivered in the most didactic way.
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, a professor
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 to have a degree from
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a university
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 in order to teach in an institution.
Incomming
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Incoming
 teachers take courses of the subject they are going to lecture.
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, they attend
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classes about
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 to teach and deliver the message in the best way. So, teachers are the most prepared to share knowledge. The
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 thought I would like to point out is that
people
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in
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our
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their
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 own
level
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 may not have the same expertise as a person who is at a higher
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.
Majority
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 of
people
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hold
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who hold
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a
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apply
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leadership
position
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 have more experience and understanding
about
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of
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 the area
their
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 are leading.
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the way
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why they
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way
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why
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 the might have more things to teach
to
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their
team
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.
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, my manager has been working for the company
20
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 years. She has been in
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different
dfiferent
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different
 positions that have
enreached
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reached
enriched
 her working
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experience
expirience
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experience
 and her knowledge about the enterprise.
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 year she was promoted to manager because she was ready to lead the
team
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. One of her
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responsibilities
responsabilities
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responsibilities
 is to train the new members of the
team
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. In conclusion, I think that
people
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at
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 a higher
position
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 will be better to teach than
people
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 at the same own
level
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,
such
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 as fellow, students or coworkers. As I mentioned before,
people
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 at an upper stage have more qualifications and expertise.
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, we have more things to learn from
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team
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the team
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 than from our peers.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peer learning
  • comfortable environment
  • open communication
  • collaboration
  • shared experiences
  • relevant examples
  • camaraderie
  • motivation
  • terminology
  • wealth of experience
  • expertise
  • broader perspective
  • structured learning
  • clear objectives
  • monitor progress
  • valuable insights
  • mentorship
  • professional development
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