You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. -Write a letter to this friend
Dear Wendy,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. I’m writing to let you know my opinion about taking a professional opportunity as an alternative to going to college.
As you already know, I embarked on the institute after graduating high school and I can’t say it was an excellent choice for my life. Therefore
, I don’t want you to commit a similar inaccuracy that I did.
In my estimation, It would be awesome if you find a proper career and gain some practical experiences that could be efficacious in your life. Furthermore
, it may encourage you to learn more about various job positions.
I hope this
information can be useful to you and I look forward to receiving your reply.
Love,
Liza.Submitted by a_zamjonov99 on
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task achievement
While your letter provides valuable advice, it might be advantageous to include more specific examples or experiences to strengthen your argument. For instance, you could describe any personal experiences or data that support your case for gaining practical experience over going to college.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, try to connect your points more fluidly. For example, transitions like 'Additionally,' 'Moreover,' or 'As a result' can help link your ideas smoothly. Also, consider breaking down the sentence 'As you already know, I embarked on the institute after graduating high school and I can’t say it was an excellent choice for my life' into two sentences to improve readability.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is very suitable for the task. It’s friendly and supportive, which is perfect for responding to a friend seeking advice.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear logical structure in your letter. Each paragraph has a single idea that contributes to your overall response, making it easy to follow.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,