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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone ((cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

#countries #phone #cellphone #apps #development
These days, the methods of paying for
purchase
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purchases
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some thing
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something
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 is greatly different from the past.
people
 for buying their needful things are often using from various apps which Set in
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a smart
the smart
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smart phone
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smartphone
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.
This
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assay
assey
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 will look at some of
arguments
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 for and against paying by apps. There are a number of benefits for paying
money
 with some electronic
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devices
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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such
 as mobile phone or tablet.
first
 and foremost, could be that it can help us to have safe and Convenient payment.When individuals utilize cash for
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the purchase
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purchase
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purchases
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, it is
possible
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a possible
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cause
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 to the
money
 is lost or stolen. Sometimes it has
a
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really dangerous for
people
 to
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carry
carring
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carrying
caring
carry
 a lot of
money
.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
, you should not count cash
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before
befor
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before
 you want to pay.In that case, your
peyment
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payment
 will be more exact and high security.
Another perks
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 would be that It actually help to
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the country
a country
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country
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country's
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 economy with do not print banknote. We all know that
for
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to
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make
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making
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money
of
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from
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 paper, we should cut a lot of trees and consume too much energy
such
 as water or electricity which
lead
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leads
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 to
waste
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the waste
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 of nonrenewable energy.
as a result
, It
cause
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to
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apply
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environmental
environmenal
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environmental
pullotion
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pollution
 ,
that
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apply
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 today is enormous problem
of
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for
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 inhabitants of the World.
on the other hand
, there are some disadvantages in that case. One of the most important is that
people
 usually do not carry any cash with
themselves
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them
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 that
it
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apply
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will
may
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create some real hitch for them.
For example
, when their mobile phone
do
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 not charge or
people
 have forgotten
taking
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 it with
themselve
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themselves
, they can not obtain anything or give any facilities. In
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conclusion
conclusien
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conclusion
, both
argument
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arguments
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 have merits as well as demerits but
definitely
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,definitely
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 the pros outweigh the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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