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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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companies
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 and the reasons people may prefer them over small ones. Big
business
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companies
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 have always been dominating the market,nowadays more than ever. The reason for
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 is that they can afford to invest a lot of money into marketing and promoting their
products
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.
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 can lead to a common misconception that big
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products
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 are better than small
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 ones. On the other ,hand the human brain is programmed in
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 a way that it is more likely to gravitate to a so-called “as seen in tv product” .The truth is that often these mass-produced items have bad quality.Big associations are the reason thousands of small
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 go bankrupt every year, and
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 a problem we have to solve.
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 problem can be resolved in a couple of ways.
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 of all the government needs to raise taxes for the large capital associations,
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 will lead to a rise in product prices and make it easier for small businesses to compete.
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 small company
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 should have a place on the shelves of big stores so that they are easily accessible by the average consumer.We should
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 find a way to demonstrate that these
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 are better and more quality because they are not mass-produced. The battle against these big
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 will be hard, but I think with a lot of effort we can save these small businesses.Meaning we are better off without them.In y opinion,the conclusion is nice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • disrupts
  • entrepreneurship
  • economic diversity
  • monopolistic
  • financial power
  • homogenization
  • awareness campaigns
  • tax incentives
  • sustainability
  • artisan
  • eco-friendly
  • dominate
  • innovation
  • stifle
  • richness
  • cultures
  • traditions
  • highlighting
  • distinguish
  • superior
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