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Solving environment problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

#environment #responsibility #organization #government
It is believed that figuring out the solution to the environmental issue would be
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 duty of international
organization
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,rather than a single country,to have
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 power to solve environmental problems that are posing serious threats to today’s world.
However
,I think that protecting the earth is the responsibility of both
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of them
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. On the one hand,environmental problems-that many
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countries
coutries
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countries
 are concerned about it;
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 they would stem from various causes.
Therefore
,each nation ought to tackle its own issue. People hold different views about how to cope with
environment
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 problems.
In addition
, the priority
environmental
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 issue is
also
 varied in each country, calling for different
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 and strategies to tackle the problem. To demonstrate, in emerging economies
such
 as Vietnam, reducing the worrying level of air pollution from industrial activities is of
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 priority.
On the other hand
, the problems that each government is actually closely related
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 coordinated action by all
nation
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nations
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 is essential.
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Moreover
Morever
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Moreover
,wealthy
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countries
coutries
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countries
 should provide financial and
and
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technological support to poor nations in the fight against green issues.
Thus
, an international effort is needed to come up with an effective environmental conservating plan. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above,I think
this
 matter should be handled together to get the enormous effects.
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