Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?
Technology is growing day by day so
habits
and daily routines of Correct article usage
the habits
people
change fastly when comparing the past. Transportation
is much easier with the technology and it is also
more comfortable. Nowadays, people
prefer car
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the car
a
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transportation
to go to work. Absolutely, I agree
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that
with
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while
of
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the
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people
. But the traffic
problems are getting increase because of the increasing individual driving rate. Traffic
is becoming more congested and exerting as
a negative impact on the environment through Change preposition
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noise
and air pollution since a spike in the number of personal cars owned. Add an article
the noise
Consequently
, to curb this
important issue, many individuals
suggest that the price of fuels should be soared. However
, I disagree with this
idea, as it may bring forth devastating consequences for the economy and it's not easy for enforcing this
hard rule.
Recently, individuals
generally don’t prefer to use
public transportation
since it is uncomfortable and it cause
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causes
spends
much more time than Correct subject-verb agreement
spend
individuals
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drive
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gas
prices rise, many people
have to use
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this
method will be happing, traffic
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the traffic
problem
seems to solve and also
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solve the air pollution Correct pronoun usage
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problem
from vehicles. From my point of view, this
method may restrict the use
of cars for-long distance travel, but it can be also
ineffective in reducing the use
of cars in cities and for short-distance travel. This
strategy only solves Add a hyphen
long-distance
long distance
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long-distance
traffic
problem
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problems
such
as two cities far apart. When look
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solve
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solution
in
an expanded perspective, the Change preposition
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problem
will not be resolved entirely. Additionally
, raising the price of fossil gas
is an illogically silly assumption as it would spark societal unrest. Let me explain, not only individuals
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do individuals
use
gas
for transportation
but also
companies and farmers use
the
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gas
both
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for both
transportation
and production. For instance
, a farmer has to use
gas
for doing
agriculture with different agriculture machines so the farmer produces vegetables and fruits much more expensive. Unnecessary verb
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Moreover
, these vegetables and fruits have been come
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come
the
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other
country
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countries
be
rise for Unnecessary verb
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supply
chain. Add an article
the supply
As a result
of
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people
who live in cities have to pay much more money to meet basic food needs. In substance, consumers have to pay more for food like meat and vegetables because of rising gas
and this
thoroughly can affect the economy.
For this
reason, firstly
, the government should promote public transportation
such
as buses, electric automobiles, and bicycles among citizens rather than elevating the price of petroleum. Secondly
, governments should support about
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deduction
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deductions
to
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for
people
who prefer public transportation
. Lastly
, Traffic
lights system can turn into Correct article usage
the Traffic
artificial
intelligence Correct article usage
an artificial
system
so Fix the agreement mistake
systems
for instance
like
adaptive signal technology can adjust the amount of time for a green light and red light in a particular signal based on real-time Change preposition
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traffic
monitoring.
To sum up, increasing gas
prices have various drawbacks, including affecting economic
situation and escalating Add an article
the economic
cost
of goods Correct article usage
the cost
and
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also
buying some basic needs would be hard. The government should promote the use
of environmentally-friendly forms of transport such
as electrical
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electric
vehicle
and give information about the Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
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habit of humanity on how Change the verb form
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our world.Replace the word
effective
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