Nowadays, in the society consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
These days the products used by
the
individuals are Correct article usage
apply
much
Change the adjective
muchly
affordable
to purchase. I believe that even though it Correct quantifier usage
more affordable
have
Change the verb form
has
few
drawbacks, positives have an upper hand which I will depict in the following passages along with Correct article usage
a few
the
suitable examples and ending up with the conclusion.
Correct article usage
apply
To begin
with, hence
the rate of consumer goods are
reduced to a greater extent it is paving Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Correct article usage
the ways
ways
towards eradicating starvation. Because it is found that Fix the agreement mistake
way
majority
of the world's population is coming under the poverty line sinceCorrect article usage
the majority
,
the price of consumer goods Remove the comma
apply
such
as rice and grains are lowered majority of the population can have privilege
to consume these food grains which eventually Change the article
the privilege
lower
the famine in the nations. Correct subject-verb agreement
lowers
For example
, in Tamil Nadu government introduced a scheme to provide rice at 2 rupees which was
successful and it was found that poverty around the state was reduced to a greater extent. Once the price of daily use commodities Change the verb form
were
are
made cheap for Change the verb form
is
purchasing
power of people will increase and eventually brings fortune to the nations by Add an article
the purchasing
increase
in life expectancy.
Add an article
an increase
the increase
In addition
, it can even help to decrease child
mortality rate. Once the daily use Add an article
the child
protein
supplements and cereals are made affordable, Change preposition
of protein
majority
of the mothers would be able to consume Correct article usage
the majority
when
they are in their maternity period which Correct pronoun usage
them when
provide
Change the verb form
provides
adequate
level of supplements for the child in the womb. For an instance, In Africa, during Add an article
an adequate
the
Correct article usage
apply
pregnancy
the apex authorities Add a comma
,pregnancy
provides
adequate protein for the mother which is Change the verb form
provide
cost
Add a hyphen
cost-effectively
effectively
and reflect the result in the Replace the word
effective
Correct your spelling
newborn
new born
Correct your spelling
newborn
with
Change preposition
apply
health
and immunity. It is important to bring down the infant mortality rate Replace the word
healthy
through
providing Change preposition
by
the
supplements at Correct article usage
apply
lower
cost helps Correct article usage
a lower
this
scenario.
On the other hand
, when the fare of daily use products are
made cheaper profit margin for the authorities along with the producers will be lowered which may Change the verb form
is
results
in the withdrawal of farming done by the individuals. To illustrate, recently when the return of tomatoes decreased considerably most of the farmers who were producing Change the verb form
result
this
product turned their land for cultivating other high yielding
crops.
To conclude, it is important for Add a hyphen
high-yielding
the
nations to bring the daily usage of food grains at cheaper prices because it certainly Correct article usage
apply
improvise
Change the verb form
improvises
the
life expectancy and lot of many advantages. As per the discussions in the above Correct article usage
apply
passages
one can say that Add a comma
,passages
advantages
are more Correct article usage
the advantages
that
the disadvantagesCorrect your spelling
than
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