Nowadays, in the society consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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individuals are
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affordable
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to purchase. I believe that even though it
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few
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drawbacks, positives have an upper hand which I will depict in the following passages along with
the
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suitable examples and ending up with the conclusion.
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with,
hence
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the rate of consumer goods
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reduced to a greater extent it is paving
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ways
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towards eradicating starvation. Because it is found that
majority
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of the world's population is coming under the poverty line since
,
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the price of consumer goods
such
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as rice and grains are lowered majority of the population can have
privilege
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to consume these food grains which eventually
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the famine in the nations.
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, in Tamil Nadu government introduced a scheme to provide rice at 2 rupees which
was
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successful and it was found that poverty around the state was reduced to a greater extent. Once the price of daily use commodities
are
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is

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made cheap for
purchasing
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the purchasing

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power of people will increase and eventually brings fortune to the nations by
increase
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an increase
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in life expectancy.
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, it can even help to decrease
child
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the child

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mortality rate. Once the daily use
protein
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of protein

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supplements and cereals are made affordable,
majority
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the majority

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of the mothers would be able to consume
when
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they are in their maternity period which
provide
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adequate
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level of supplements for the child in the womb. For an instance, In Africa, during
the
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pregnancy
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the apex authorities
provides
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adequate protein for the mother which is
cost
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effectively
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and reflect the result in the
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new born
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with
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health
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and immunity. It is important to bring down the infant mortality rate
through
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providing
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supplements at
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cost helps
this
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scenario.
On the other hand
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, when the fare of daily use products
are
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made cheaper profit margin for the authorities along with the producers will be lowered which may
results
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result

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in the withdrawal of farming done by the individuals. To illustrate, recently when the return of tomatoes decreased considerably most of the farmers who were producing
this
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product turned their land for cultivating other
high yielding
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crops. To conclude, it is important for
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nations to bring the daily usage of food grains at cheaper prices because it certainly
improvise
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the
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life expectancy and lot of many advantages. As per the discussions in the above
passages
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one can say that
advantages
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are more
that
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the disadvantages

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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