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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Taking
Indonesia
 as the sample, it is one of the countries that enact the free flow of
goods
. The government believes that
this
 practice might bring benefits to its economy. It increases the export rate and the GDP because
Indonesia
 can expand its marketing of
goods
 and services to other countries and the trade barriers or tariffs will decrease or even vanish. The government
also
 claims that it can decrease the unemployment rate because lots of jobs will be created.
Moreover
, lots of investors will be more likely to invest in
Indonesia
,
therefore
 it will bring a good impact on
Indonesia
’s infrastructure.
Besides
, with the tight competition that exist because of the free flow of
goods
, it can
also
 stimulate the entrepreneurs and the local industries to compete and increase their skills, competencies, and standard which results in the betterment quality of Indonesian products.
On the other hand
, some people are against the free flow of
goods
 across national borders.
Instead
 of increasing the export sector, they argue that the trade balance deficit in
Indonesia
 can occur because several Indonesian products cannot fulfil the standard of the international market, like the
Indonesia
- EU palm oil cases. Seeing the nature of
Indonesia
 where most of them feel more proud of consuming the foreign product, the import rate will increase and the inability to compete can cause harm to local industries.
Besides
, the existence of foreign investors and the job fields it promised will not be maximized, many foreign workers will flood
Indonesia
 due to competition in the quality of human resources. Local workers will be increasingly marginalized if they cannot compete.
Moreover
, there is a possibility of the massive exploitation of natural resources that might trigger Indonesian environmental degradation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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