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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicle #passengers #vehicles
In the
last
 few years
the
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technology improved in so many different aspects and it becomes part of everything in our lives. In the
next
 few
years
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 the idea of
driverless
 vehicles will become a truth, so many
transportations
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transportation
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such
 as
bus
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buses
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,
cars
 and trains will be managed by robots or automated drivers. In
this
 essay, I will be explored both of
advantages
 and disadvantages
for
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this
 idea. On the one hand,
driverless
cars
 can make our lives easier and
it
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help us to have a rest. It
considered
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also
 to be safe, so it will decrease the percentage of car accidents which may
caused
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 by irresponsible or drunk drivers.
In addition
, Passengers during the trip can spend their time reading books, watching movies, eating or doing
online
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meeting
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.
Also
, one of the obvious
advantages
 of automated
cars
 that
it
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 will
be provide
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 a lot for
elderly
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the elderly
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 and people with special
needed
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.
On the other hand
, when we use
the
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driverless
cars
 a lot of drivers
they
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will
loss
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 their job and a lot of families will
be stay
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 without any income.
Moreover
, the cost of automated
cars
 will be high and it could cost more in maintenance if the software
damaged
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. To conclude, even though that
driverless
cars
 have some
advantages
 but their
advantages
 become
outweigh
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