An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. what are advantage and disadvantage for both individual and companies to shopping online?

There is no doubt that these days type of shopping more popular and different way to
shop
. the question is the figure of customers increasing to buy shopping online? in
this
essay, I will discuss the impact of online shopping on companies or individuals. In terms of advantages, shopping to use smart phone or computer is easier and more time-saving than traditional shopping and .the main reason given to support
this
claim is that I do not use a car and walk to go local
shop
to illustrate if I wanna
shop
online I need good internet and smartphone
this
is a simple way to
shop
online
such
as
amazne
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amazon
amazing
in other words
, my
producte
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product
products
arrive qouqlyto my home .
this
a
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easy way to do
sjopping
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shopping
.
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, many
custermers
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customers
im
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in
many
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do not like shopping online .
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, some
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people
peolpe
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people
think
online
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market
not
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some people buy
eletoric
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electronic
electric
mation
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nation
and in
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is fake and not like
image
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.
secondly
adult
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do not have
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a smart
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smart
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smartphone
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phone
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and
this
type is difficult for
him
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,they like
local
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a local
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shop
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.
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is
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because
becouse
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because
easy for some
adult
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and
oldest
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to buy
for
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exsamble
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example
food.
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,some
some
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people
peole
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have
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problem
proplem
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problems
in
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the cost
thik
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think
is
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difficult
duffiecult
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difficult
and some
custem
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custom
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conclusion
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conclusion
,
although
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online has it is pros and cons .
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i
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that
shoping
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shopping
onlie
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online
one
is best
in
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for
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goloalization
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globalization
word
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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