Many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe grandparents can take care of their children, while others think t=childcare centres are better. discuss both views and give your opinion?

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era, It is common for families where
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parents
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working
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. A number of working
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think
grandparents
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look after their
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children
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children
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. whilst others believe
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the ideal way to take
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of their
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essay should discuss
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sides and give your personal point of view. on the one hand,
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think that working
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give responsibility to the
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of take
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of their
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parents
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to keep their
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among
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the
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,
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stages, so it
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to take
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of their
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lives in
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,so
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are the working parent they give responsibility to their
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to take
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of their
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.they can
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busy
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grandparents
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some stuff.
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,
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think that working
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believe
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take
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of
children
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. I would like to outline one more reason of
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responsibility to
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is that they can give properly
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teach
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tech
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them
a
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discipline and how to
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behavior
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in front of elders.
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both
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my
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doing
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do
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the job
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job
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, but
grandparent
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my grandparent
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me all the
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discipline
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discipline
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front
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front
of
elders
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the elders
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, some
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argue that day-
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centers
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are
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ideal.
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,
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care
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centers
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high
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training to tackle the
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parents
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perents
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parents
give
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preference
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to leave their
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in
childcare
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centres
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doctor appointments, so
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leave my child to
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care
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centres
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. because they know how to handle the
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properly.
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, I would like to highlight one more reason of leave
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to
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day
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care
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centres
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childcare
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centre
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help
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the kid
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kid
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to complete their home
works
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childcare
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guide
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kid
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to complete
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assignments from school.
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time I leave my child and I was
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about their homework, but when came to pick them up, so I get
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that
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done
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.
lastly
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, some
people
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think that working
parents
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believe
grandparents
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can take
care
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of their
children
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. other whilst, the ideal way to leave their
children
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in
childcare
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centres
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. In my opinion,
grandparents
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are the better choice
of
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take
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care
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their
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of their
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children
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because
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also
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engage them busy to handle
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the child and
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teach
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tech
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them how to
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behaviour
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behavior
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in front
elder
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of elder
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people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional bond
  • communication
  • family history
  • flexible
  • fixed hours
  • availability
  • structured environment
  • trained professionals
  • educational development
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  • planned activities
  • stimulating environment
  • individual attention
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