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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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history
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about
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history
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it with relevant examples.
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, every
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 have at least one kingdom in their land and have some
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treasury
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there0.
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 of middle age people
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to
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 finding out those
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get
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 valuable income.
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, in India “
Thamilnadu
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Tamilnadu
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in
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the side
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 of the house to
finding
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secreate
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secrete
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there
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 land.
Secondly
, some university and school crowds are becoming love to find how the post pupils build their houses, what are the
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materials
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, those are very interesting to more and more crowds than other previous and they research as
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 as to learn and educated what
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history
 of the houses and building around them. At that time, the community mainly use
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 encitant time.
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, I think that
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 that area is the best option
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to research ancient
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structures
. In conclusion,
history
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 of the old structures near
they
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in
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is becoming
most
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the most
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interested
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 title around the crowd and
this
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in this
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explain
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explain
 the reasons and methods
what
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 they use.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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