some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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to decide the level of
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for each criminal case. Some believe that
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we should give the same
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type
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of
crime
committed regardless of the
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background. Others think that we should always consider the
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crime
and differentiate the level of
punishment
based on that. Each side
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its say,
however
, I believe we need to look into the
motivation
when we decide the level of
punishment
as depends on the cause of the
crime
the meaning of the committed
crime
becomes significantly different. The
first
view set a rule to give the criminals
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punishment
for
same
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types of
crime
without considering the
motivation
, and by
this
,
judgement
becomes quite simple and straightforward.
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robbery for a certain amount of valuable items. We sentence
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of one person. The
judgement
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the
second
view
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a
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different
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different
approach. A murder from personal
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should be considered differently from a murder to protect oneself from an assault. The
judgement
can be prone to be subjective and
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circumstantial
,
nevertheless
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motivation
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a justice point of view. Considering the above two views, I believe the latter is better from
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and humanity point of
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. People should be punished not only
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type of
crime
they committed but
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the reason why they committed it. Without that observation, we cannot give fair
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to commit it.
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