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Many people believe that it is a good idea to have a dress code at workplaces. ‎Do you agree or disagree with your statement? Give your opinion and ‎examples from your own experience.

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Nowadays, the introduction of a dress code in companies at the office or during working hours outside the company's territory is already an implemented practice.
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, we cannot still say that
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 situation is ubiquitous in
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field
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. By the way, I have an example from my own experience, related to the application of
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 rules in the forensic system of state departmental institutions. On the one hand, HR specialists are convinced that the general style of clothing excludes inappropriate discussion of the wardrobe of colleagues at work.
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, it prevents an unhealthy psychological atmosphere among representatives of various social groups.
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, taking the position of leaders, the message of introducing requirements for wearing a special uniform for advertising and promotion purposes is understandable. Whether or
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, it is obvious that a recognizable brand of
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 clothing forms the image of the firm. There is a
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 point of view which expresses by the employees themselves. They oftentimes suppose (or even insist on) that the requirements for the form of clothing limits their freedom
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 self-expression. Referring to the above, In my practice, I have met colleagues who tried to sabotage or ignore dress code corporate norms.
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, there was a case of challenge in court that
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 not resolved in
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 of the workers. In my opinion, corporate rules can be introduced in the form of mandatory recommendations during working hours. Contrary to office policies, these principles should not extend to the privacy and
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 of individuals outside of the office. I think it's acceptable to have distinctive norms for business meetings and public speaking as well. I agree that the
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 and appearance of employees can tell a lot about the company and affect the atmosphere within the team.
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