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Some people believe that universities should only accept students with high marks. Others believe that universities must accept student of all ages regardless their previous grades. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few
individuals
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 argue that territory
education
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need
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 to be given
for
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 the ones who have top score while others opine that college
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 to consider all the people applying for the studies no matter their age or even their past grades.
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 these perspectives are different I support the former statement which I will depict in the following essays along with my opinion in the
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 with, once the criteria for getting
seat
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 in the university is raised
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, according to the marks it can pave
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 towards
quality
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 of
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. Because only the ones who are interested in studying will be present in the college
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 teaching them won’t be a concern
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, it can even help the companies to choose the
individuals
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 for jobs once they are graduated because these
students
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 already went through a difficult huddle which is admission process.
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, getting a seat in any of the
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 in India
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 top grades
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however
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, once the person
clear
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 the cut
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 marks he
who
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can easily get hired by fortune 500
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 big 4 companies with an amazing package. Since the
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benchmark
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bench mark
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 is higher
students
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 will get into
the
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competitive
competative
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competitive
 mind which helps to increase the standard of
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.
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,
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admitting
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scholars without any
criteria’s
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 in the universities may help
individuals
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 who really wanted to learn.
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,
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 may adversely
affects
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majority
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the majority
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 of the crowd who struggled hard to get good grades. Eventually, people might lose interest
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 learning which can cause serious illiteracy among the citizens. For an instance, when the world witnessed Covid-19 in the year 2020, CBSC schools in India declared all
students
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 who were in 10 and 12
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 does not have to write any exams on top of that they are promoted.
This
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 later became a controversy among
students
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 and even affected
individuals
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 adversely.
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 it is necessary to have certain guidelines to get into territory
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. To sum up, I believe that stand of
education
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 is important. But how can it be analysed?
through
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setting
cut off
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 marks for entering college is necessary on top of that it can even develop competition among
students
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 which gradually helps in rising the standard of
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education
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.

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