Fresh water is a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, increasing demand made it a global problem. What are the causes of increasing demand? What measures can governments and individuals take to respond to the problem?

As is known to us all, the proportion of
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of the whole
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resource volume on the planet. Under
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worrying
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, the deficiency of available
water
is catching the public’s attention. The main reasons and feasible solutions
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that will be illustrated in the following essay. What lead to the issues displaying
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dramatic rising
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of
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this
precious resource is not just the enormous development of
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industrialization but the crazily roaring population. With
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improvement of our life quality and our people’s livelihood, the increase of the population seems to be a must tendency owing to the higher infant birth and
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rate which is always regarded as the function of
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scientific progress.
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the upgrade of industrialization matters as well. Being in
such
a complicated situation, some measures must have done by us to stop it from getting more serious. The authorities could appeal
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public or establish efficient policies in order to cultivate the awareness of the dwellers of a country, as well as the residents should
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alter their daily habits if possible. All class of
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society should contribute their power of own to face
this
difficult condition since the earth is our only homeland. Based on the mentioned analysis, the trend towards
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of fresh
water
is triggered by launching some specific strategies, which can be properly addressed by the joint effort of both governments and people. Albeit there are
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amount of difficulties we might meet, we have the confidence and courage to overcome
this
tough situation.
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