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Today, many people do not realize how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world?

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world
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people
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world
. As a matter of
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 some
people
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information
of
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 natural products, and we can show how can
to
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correct
this
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build
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,
learn
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 and
another process
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. Many
people
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have
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live
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 in the village, especially young
people
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life
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a
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young
people
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rush to the city.
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, on the one
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city
life
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 to underestimation of natural products. Just later they are understanding for used
naturally
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life
. The decide
this
 problem we can a lot of
procedure
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give
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 us information
of
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naturally
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natural
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life
.
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, prepare classes about natural products, to
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advertise
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 and other. In the classes, to give information on the medical side,
for example
, about food, when we eat naturally,
health
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are
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live a more than you eat food with some chemical additives. The more innovations and build development
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world
 the less natural becomes in the
world
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