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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause?

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Corporate companies and international
business
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 invest a sum of money towards marketing and advertising.
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this
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attract
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the
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people
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 buying products from large companies
instead
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 of small
scale
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. These
small
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scale
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 industries suffer from various problems
such
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a
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as
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 closure of local corporate, unemployment and monopoly in
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market
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the market
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. A viable solution to
this
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by
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 reducing taxes and increasing funding.
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people
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 have the
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mindset
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mind set
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mindset
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 of buying things from a large brand
of
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or
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 company consciously or unconsciously. International dominance
have
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 made a trademark in
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society. It creates pride and prestige for the
costumers
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customers
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. Thereby, local corporate suffer a lot leading to
closure
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 of the company. Branding or advertising creates
monopoly
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a monopoly
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 in the
market
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.
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, leads to unemployment of the small
scale
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people
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. To combat the
above mentioned
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 problems, both government and society should take responsibility and care. Government should take necessary steps to reduce
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taxes, which will create a positive impact on
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individuals. Local authorities, should increase the funds and allocate a place for them in
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market
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the market
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 to showcase their products.
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 pulls the interest of buyers. Both
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society and
people
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 are equally responsible
in
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 helping
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small industries. To recapitulate,
people
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 should buy quality things from the company, whether it is large
scale
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 or small
scale
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. International trading
have
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 reduced the
market
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scale
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • disrupts
  • entrepreneurship
  • economic diversity
  • monopolistic
  • financial power
  • homogenization
  • awareness campaigns
  • tax incentives
  • sustainability
  • artisan
  • eco-friendly
  • dominate
  • innovation
  • stifle
  • richness
  • cultures
  • traditions
  • highlighting
  • distinguish
  • superior
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