Human activity had had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. SOme people think this cannot be changed with others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both side of views and give your opinion.

Actually is a true event climate
change
the human being makes in our planet,
unfortunately
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these many changes
make
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cause
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some disasters in the way of life around the
world
no
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not
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only in the humans
also
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but also
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in
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nature
and the
wild life
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wildlife
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. On one side I think if all the human race
don't
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doesn't
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agree all the changes in climate and
nature
for
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to
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stop devastating actions,
this
world
can't survive
to
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our stay and collapse in the next one hundred year under our hands, they mean the imminent extinction of all being live in the
world
, included all the animals,
nature
and
off
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course all the human race.
By
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the other
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other
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side I think
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mind
change
is possible through the education movements around the
world
what
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which
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make a consistent
diffrence
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difference
and help
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people learn how
stop
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climate
change
and
gurantee
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guarantee
the
preserve
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spots like Amazonas, they kind of small but efficient actions make a great
change
in the sad destiny of our planet. In
conclusion
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I think
what
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the best way to preserve the
planet
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planet's
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health is
begin
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to begin
beginning
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in our houses with little action
for
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, for
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example: 1. Choose organic food. 2. Choose
nature
and organic materials. 3. Make less garbage. 4. Manage the use of the car,
reduce
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and reduce
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it. 5. Use Public transport. 6 Use Bicycle. 7 Stop contamination
in
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all levels.
That activities
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and many more are the first
step
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steps
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to stop the earth
die
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from dying
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, if we teach that to our family and friends, we'll make a lot of difference and maybe can save our lives
of
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from
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the
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extinction.
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