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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #universities #offer #places #students #marks #ages #school
Some
people
 argued that young
students
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color
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 should be adopted in
universities
, while others
people
 supposed that the states should accept all
people
 regardless of age or
they
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if they
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 are not good at school. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both
view
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 and
i
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 agree strongly with the
second
 view. On the one hand, the majority of
students
have
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who have
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highest
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the highest
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 marks
was
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are
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good
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a good
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student
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students
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 so they should be accepted in
universities
 is better than accepting everyone. The reason is that these youngsters will
study
 harder than others,
if
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 the
universities
 accept them, they will be one of the
top
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of
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prestigious
universities
 in
country
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.
Moreover
, if
students
 who are not good at, they
study
 with good
students
, they will not be able to catch up with others.
Consequently
, they will not gain
necessary
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 skills for social. So accepting
students
 having
highest
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the highest
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 marks play an important role.
On the other hand
, education is very necessary for everyone, it is a key lead to
successful
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. If
universities
 do not accept
youngster
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youngsters
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 who
do
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 not have flying
color
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colors
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, they will not
many
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 knowledge and will not have social
skill
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. All
students
 should have a fair chance to get
their
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 chosen university. The states should encourage young
people
 to
study
 by free tuition for poor
people
 or
create
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 many
chance
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chances
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 for
students
 not
having
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to have
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highest
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the highest
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 marks. That way, there will have more
people
 to contribute to the economic development of the country. In my conclusion, studying is very important. So the governments should offer a variety of
solution
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solutions
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 to help everyone
having
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have
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chance
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the chance
a chance
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 to
study
.
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  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
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  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
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