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School should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with the statemen.

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It is true that some parents and teachers try to force
children
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 to learn
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. Because they know that it is difficult to work without a foreign
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 in today's life. In
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 essay, I will examine how
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 is true On the one hand, it is a good knowledge of
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language
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. There are several reasons why
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 learn another
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. Students can learn about the culture of the country by learning another
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, there are
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 negative aspects of forcing
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 to study. For
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children
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 cannot quickly learn something they are not interested in and a lot of time,
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 will be lost.
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Moreover
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 the
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learns
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 that their country is for from their culture.
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children
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 should be consulted when learning other languages.
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 don't force
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