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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

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These days a large number of
people
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 prefer to
travel
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 more than before. It's rooted in the Improvement of
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's financial level that cusses them to visit more countries, know more cultures and gain different experiences. It seems that the world is dotted with a lot of complications, especially financial issues. When
people
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 have a lot of problems they prefer to solve them to do other additional activities like
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.
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, in deprived areas like some districts in the South of Tehran, insufficient incomes and high costs make a contribution to fixing only the basic needs. Apart from
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, with better financial situation
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 can allocate their money to other activities and get some rest. It seems to me that
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's situation is better than before so they can
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 more. There is no denying the fact that, travelling brings great benefits to travellers. As a
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traveller you face a lot of challenges which exert a constructive effect on your life. In
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 regard, it seems to me that around 50 years ago,
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 who travelled to Mecca had a high position in the Iranian public eye.
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 vision is rooted in some reasons.
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, the religious aspect of
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, the serious challenges which travellers should handle. Something like the length of the
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 and risk of bandits. Undoubtedly, learning is an integral part of
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. Travellers can learn from other passengers, local
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, even nature, etc. Without a shadow of a doubt, there are too many reasons for
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 to
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. Something like gaining some experiences which are useful to have a better life and it has a relaxing aspect too. But financial situations perform a key role in travelling. Most
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 would rather manage their necessary problems than think about other things
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 these days
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 manage their problems more than before and totally they can have trips to other cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Globalization
  • Professional development
  • Social media platforms
  • Exotic locations
  • Cultural exchange
  • Personal growth
  • Adaptable
  • Open-minded
  • Mental health
  • Daily routines
  • Responsibilities
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