Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? In about 300 words, give examples to support your ideas.

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which shows “Transport preferences among young people from different countries”.
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the
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we can see, that in
France
people prefer
cars
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three times more, than other variations of transport,
such
as
:
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motorcycle
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motorcycles
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and
bicycle
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bicycles
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. In
Germany
,
on the contrary
,
bicyclies
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bicycles
bicycling
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in more, than
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another countries
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,
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because
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because
there is a doctrine on the prevention of air pollution. United
States
of
America
contrast with it is
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of motorcycles, in
this
country
this
mode of transport popular by fifteen
percents
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,
than
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Germany
and by ten
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percent
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percents
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more, than
France
and Great Britain taken together. Great Britain does not stand out on
this
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the quantity
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indicator of
cars
equal
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to
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the United
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States
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; bicycles rate more, than
France
or
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the United
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States
of
America
, but less, than
Germany
by fifteen
percents
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;
quantity
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the quantity
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level of
cars
equal to French ten
percents
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and is at the minimum of
this
chart. Young people prefer most
cars
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the
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France
, bicycles in
the
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Germany
, but motorcycles in the United
States
of
America
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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