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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the country side and not build new homes: what is your opinion about this

#places #homes #space #countryside #people #country #side
It is undeniable that new dwellings are required,but there is no place to build them. some
peoples
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 argue that
is
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the only way to make it happen is by using
country side
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countryside
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 Plots,
while
 others advocate that it is necessary to preserve these
lands
 to protect nature. I agree with latter the statement because
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the countrysideside
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countrysideside
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countryside
 is the place where
expect
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 maintain
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 and these
lands
 are the main source
for
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food
 and
agriculture
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 activities.
countrysideside
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countryside side
 is the place where all kinds of creatures
are living
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,just because of
these landscape
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this landscape
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, if it is
also
 occupied by residents many species become extinct,
pollution
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and pollution
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 levels
also
a
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surge within no time
this
 scenario will be vulnerable not only to living species but
also
 to
a human beings
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human beings
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.
for instance
 in the UK area of
countrysideside
 allowed to resident where there are some indigenous animals that
got
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 eradicated
due to
 pollution and lack of pure oxygen.
Thus
These activity
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 can
leads
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 to hefty damage to both
environment
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the environment
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 and humans. It is very apparent that
countryside
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 sides
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exclusively dedicated to
that
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agriculture and
food
 products zones. These fields are providing 100%
Food
 supplies to the nation we
toneed
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need
 protect these
lands
 to increase
food
 demands in future, if we
allotted
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 these
lands
 for residential zones
then
 sudden plunge in
food
 production.
this
 is
much
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 bigger problem than accommodation. for ,example in India there are some forests and
countrysideside
 areas are under the control of
government
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the government
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 to ,
manintn
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manage
eco
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the
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syste
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system
, .
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Thus
 it is necessary to
maintaian
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maintain
 the
Country side
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 area
strickly
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strictly
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 for the Local activities. In
conclustion
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conclusion
 Moving dwelling to
country
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the country
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 is
very
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attractiev
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attractive
 option,
however
teh
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the
 results are shing lond term adverse effects on
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the enviroments
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enviroments
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environments
environment
 and other living
creature
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creatures
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 including human beings. and
food
shortade
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shortage
shortages
 is the indirect effect . ,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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