In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the country side and not build new homes: what is your opinion about this

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It is undeniable that new dwellings are required,but there is no place to build them. some
peoples
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argue that
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the only way to make it happen is by using
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others advocate that it is necessary to preserve these
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to protect nature. I agree with latter the statement because
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the countrysideside
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countrysideside
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is the place where
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maintain
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and these
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are the main source
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food
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activities.
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countrysideside
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countryside side
is the place where all kinds of creatures
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,just because of
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occupied by residents many species become extinct,
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surge within no time
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scenario will be vulnerable not only to living species but
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.
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in the UK area of
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allowed to resident where there are some indigenous animals that
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eradicated
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pollution and lack of pure oxygen.
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can
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to hefty damage to both
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and humans. It is very apparent that
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sides
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exclusively dedicated to
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agriculture and
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products zones. These fields are providing 100%
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supplies to the nation we
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need
protect these
lands
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to increase
food
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demands in future, if we
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these
lands
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for residential zones
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sudden plunge in
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production.
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bigger problem than accommodation. for ,example in India there are some forests and
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areas are under the control of
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to ,
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manage
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system
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it is necessary to
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maintain
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area
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for the Local activities. In
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conclusion
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attractive
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teh
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the
results are shing lond term adverse effects on
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enviroments
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environments
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and other living
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creatures
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including human beings. and
food
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shortade
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shortage
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is the indirect effect . ,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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