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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#schools #force #children #language
His father was very angry with him when he heard he had damaged the car. His father blew up at him when he heard he had damaged the car. My grandmother never thinks of
traveling
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 by plane. The idea of
traveling
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travelling
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 by plane is never in my grandmother's
thought
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. These wine bottles have many strange shapes. There are many strange shapes
from
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 these wine bottles He spent time setting up an exhibition of costumes from all periods of history. He was employed in setting up an exhibition of costumes down the ages. Those stores will probably accept
a
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credit
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instead
 of cash.
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