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There are many different types music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

#music #world #country
People
 move from
one
country
 to another
country
 they need permission, but
song
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the song
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 can anywhere easily without
barrier
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barriers
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.
Music
 is very important, and many types of
music
are
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exit
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exist
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 in
today
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today's
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 world.
This
 essay will explicate the importance of
music
 and will give
example
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examples
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;
also
 will explain the importance of traditional
music
.
Firstly
,
Song
 does motivate
people
 too much.
This
 means
,
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 when
people
do
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apply
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fail
any
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at any
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 work after trying more than
one
times
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time
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,
and
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apply
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he
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they
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loss
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 hope.
In
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this
time
 some songs help
people
 to courage to do work again.
For instance
, teenagers are listening now Unstoppable
song
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songs
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 to motivate them. Due
to
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thisto
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, songs are very important.
In addition
,
song
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the song
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 is the key
things
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thing
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 for passing leisure
time
.
This
 is because
of
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apply
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, when
people
 do travel
one
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from one
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 place to another place, or
waiting
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forwaiting
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 any reason these
time
people
listen
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tolisten
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music
.
Thus
,
music
 is very important.
On the other hand
, traditional
music
 does introduce
people
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to his
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his
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their
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 own culture.
This
 means, traditional
music
 shows a clear image of a
country
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country's
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scanario
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scenario
, and
people
 can know
his
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their
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country
for
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by
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 listening
traditional
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to traditional
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music
.
Such
 as,
Baul
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Baul's
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song
 does represent Bangladeshi tradition. For
this
 reason, traditional
music
 is very important. In conclusion,
music
 helps to
passing
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pass
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 leisure
time
, and inspiration in his life.
Although
 traditional
music
 does represent
one
country
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country's
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 culture.
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