There are many different types music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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People
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move from
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country
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to another
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they need permission, but
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song
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can anywhere easily without
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barriers
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Music
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is very important, and many types of
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are
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exist
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in
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world.
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essay will explicate the importance of
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and will give
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;
also
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will explain the importance of traditional
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.
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,
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does motivate
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too much.
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means
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when
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do
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fail
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work after trying more than
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times
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hope.
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this
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time
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some songs help
people
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to courage to do work again.
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, teenagers are listening now Unstoppable
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song
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to motivate them. Due
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, songs are very important.
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,
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song
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is the key
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for passing leisure
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is because
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, when
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do travel
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one
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from one
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place to another place, or
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any reason these
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people
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listen
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music
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.
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,
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is very important.
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, traditional
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does introduce
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to his
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his
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their
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own culture.
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means, traditional
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shows a clear image of a
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country
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scanario
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scenario
, and
people
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can know
his
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country
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for
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listening
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to traditional
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music
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.
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as,
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song
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does represent Bangladeshi tradition. For
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reason, traditional
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is very important. In conclusion,
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helps to
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leisure
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, and inspiration in his life.
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traditional
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does represent
one
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country
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culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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