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Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some people think that
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school
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schools
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 should take
responsibility
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 for
transport
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transporting
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children
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 to
school
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. Other people believe that
parents
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 only can transport
children
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 to
school
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.Who is right? In my
issue
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i
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I
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 consider
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this
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these
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 views and
gives
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give
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 my own opinion.
Body paragraph 1
In the
first
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parents
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wants
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want
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 to get guarantees that the
school
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 takes
responsibility
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 for their
children
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.It is right. If buses drive from the
school
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,
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school
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the school
a school
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 should
take’s
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take
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responsibility
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 for
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children
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the children
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,which
siting
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sitting
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in
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on
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 the
bus
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. But
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school
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the school
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 should
takes
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take
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responsibility
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 only when
Child
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the Child
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enter
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enters
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 the
bus
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 and finish takes when
child
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the child
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exit
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exits
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 the
bus
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.
School
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 should not
takes
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take
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responsibility
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 for the
children
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,which
staying
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stay
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 in the
bus
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 station or
going
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go
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 to the magazine.
Body paragraph 2
In the
second
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parents
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 should get
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children
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their children
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 to
the
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apply
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school
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. I think it is incorrect
,
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apply
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 because
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school
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schools
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 should help
parents
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 to get
children
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in
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into
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school
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.
parents
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 do not always have time to get their
children
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 to
school
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.
Conclusion
In my opinion,
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school
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the school
a school
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 should
takes
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take
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responsibility
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 for the
children
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,which
siting
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sitting
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in
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on
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 the
school
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bus
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 and for the
children
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 which located in the
school
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 area

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • school
  • government
  • parents
  • children
  • transport
  • bus
  • walk
  • cycle
  • car
  • route
  • distance
  • safety
  • cost
  • money
  • support
  • equal
  • need
  • plan
  • policy
  • program
  • option
  • independence
  • attendance
  • access
  • safety
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