Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that
school
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schools
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should take
responsibility
for
transport
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transporting
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children
to
school
. Other people believe that
parents
only can transport
children
to
school
.Who is right? In my
issue
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,issue
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i
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I
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consider
this
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these
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views and
gives
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give
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my own opinion. In the
first
version,
parents
wants
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want
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to get guarantees that the
school
takes
responsibility
for their
children
.It is right. If buses drive from the
school
,
school
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the school
a school
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should
take’s
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take
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responsibility
for
children
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the children
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,which
siting
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sitting
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in
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on
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the
bus
. But
school
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the school
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should
takes
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take
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responsibility
only when
Child
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the Child
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enter
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enters
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the
bus
and finish takes when
child
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the child
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exit
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exits
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the
bus
.
School
should not
takes
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take
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responsibility
for the
children
,which
staying
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stay
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in the
bus
station or
going
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go
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to the magazine. In the
second
version,
parents
should get
children
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their children
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to
the
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apply
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school
. I think it is incorrect
,
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apply
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because
school
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schools
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should help
parents
to get
children
in
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into
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school
.
parents
do not always have time to get their
children
to
school
. In my opinion,
school
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the school
a school
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should
takes
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take
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responsibility
for the
children
,which
siting
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sitting
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in
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on
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the
school
bus
and for the
children
which located in the
school
area
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