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Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that
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school
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responsibility
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transport
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children
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 to
school
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. Other people believe that
parents
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 only can transport
children
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school
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.Who is right? In my
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i
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this
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gives
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 my own opinion. In the
first
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parents
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wants
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 to get guarantees that the
school
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responsibility
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 for their
children
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.It is right. If buses drive from the
school
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,
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school
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the school
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take’s
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take
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responsibility
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 for
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children
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the children
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,which
siting
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in
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bus
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. But
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school
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the school
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takes
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responsibility
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 only when
Child
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the Child
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enter
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enters
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bus
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 and finish takes when
child
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the child
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exit
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exits
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bus
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School
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takes
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responsibility
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,which
staying
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 in the
bus
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 station or
going
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 to the magazine. In the
second
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parents
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 should get
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children
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their children
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 to
the
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apply
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school
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. I think it is incorrect
,
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 because
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school
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schools
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parents
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 to get
children
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in
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school
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.
parents
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 do not always have time to get their
children
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 to
school
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. In my opinion,
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school
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the school
a school
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takes
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take
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responsibility
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 for the
children
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,which
siting
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sitting
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in
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on
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 the
school
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bus
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children
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 which located in the
school
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