Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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first
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position is that
school
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schools
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and government should take responsibility to transport
children
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. In my
opinion
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if it would
happened
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happen
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government
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the government
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will
must
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apply
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to
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apply
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protect
children
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in all parts of
traveling
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travelling
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. But parents wouldn't have
an
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any
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information about their
children
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. The
second
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position is that parents should get
children
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. I think that it is better than
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first
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opinion. Because parents have more control over
there
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their
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children
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. But
in
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at
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the same time. They have work and don't have time to do
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. I think that government must
to
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apply
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do everything to protect people and
children
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is
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in
the
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apply
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first
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way.
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