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More and more companies are allowing employees to work from home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Thanks to technology improvements, ever since the Covid-19 pandemic outburst, many companies adopted a new approach to deal with the pandemic problems, which is working remotely. In my point of view, working from
home
 has a positive impact on people.
This
 essay will
further
 discuss how
this
 tendency might be beneficial to the public.
To begin
 with, travel to the workplace every day can be exhausting while working from
home
 makes it possible to ditch the time-consuming commute, and
also
 diminish traffic congestion and lead to less air pollution.
Moreover
, people can be more comfortable and cosy during
work
.
For example
, they do not need to suit up or wear make-up, they can
work
 on the bed or sofa in a relaxing way as long as they can still
work
 efficiently, and they get to spend less money
such
 as buying new clothes for
work
.
On the other hand
, there are a few drawbacks to working from
home
.
Firstly
, since people stay
home
 at all times, they will have to pay more for the electricity bill. But the salary did not increase, and
as a result
, every family cost more than in the past.
Secondly
, it can be difficult to separate the
work
 hours from the life hours. The boundaries between job and life can become blurred, making it difficult to achieve
work
-life balance goals. In conclusion, though there are some reasons to believe that working remotely has a downside, I believe the merits of working from
home
 outweigh all other drawbacks.
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