You work at home and have a problem with a piece of quipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter -describe the problem with the equipment -explain how this problem is affecting your work -say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir, My name is Joy Kim. I am writing

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letter to express my disappointment with the quality of the projector that I purchased

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week

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on October 24th, 2022.

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, I had the opportunity to visit your store, and I decided to buy a black projector. It was working smoothly until yesterday when I wanted to

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before attending the presentation

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, but when I pressed the power button, it just came up with a black screen without any pictures.

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, I will have a presentation. It is very important to me. Because it is my final text. I spent a lot of time preparing. I need a projector to assist me in displaying some information and video while I am speaking. It

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easier

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for everyone to understand.

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, it will help me get a high score on

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text I would be grateful if you could come and check the equipment at my home, or replace it with new equipment I look forward to hearing you soon. thank you Yours faithfully, Joy Kim

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

183 words

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