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Some people say that now Is the best time In history to be living. What Is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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From the beginning of mankind, the best
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 for living always came under discussion.
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 debated
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which
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 is best for living.
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 is best for living, and which part
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 history was best to
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live in. The current era considers the age of
technological
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the technological
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 revolution that influenced
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human
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 greatly. With
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 in mind,
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time
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live in, from medical advancement to innovation in medicine helping
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people
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 to live
long
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 and healthy
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 without worrying
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 diseases. Children
vaccinated
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 to counter some deadly viruses that caused many deaths in the past. One more and widely debated reason is the internet,
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 changed the way of
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 of
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; nowadays,
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 made everything
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 so easy.
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, all financial activities can be performed from the comfort of home. Distances are no more affecting
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lives because of digital platforms; anyone can contact their loved ones anytime from any part of the world. So according to me, all
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 points support the argument that
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the present
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time
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 is best for living. As
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time
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 there could be another
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 in history when
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 was so good. In ancient roman times, society respects the person who has good character; that society was free of
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 who considered money as everything.
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 that
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,
people
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 always consider society
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 themselves so, we can say that
time
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 was good because
people
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 live like a family. Social
life
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 was at
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its peak
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people
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 spend their spare
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 in gatherings of
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 community. Everybody knew who
living
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next
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 to their door,
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and everybody
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ready
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 to help in need. Quality of
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always
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 important for human beings, present
time
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always
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 good from past
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time
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 in rare cases some old times
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 consider best in some sort.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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