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Some policymakers have the notion that the economic progress is the most important measure to be taken for development of a country. Do you agree or disagree?

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according to
opinions
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 of
large
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 amount of people, economic growth is the most fundamental principle which causes a
country
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 achieves numerous developments. I
also
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 believe the aforementioned fact and some points will be addressed in the essay below. there is no denying the fact that the necessity of a life with high standards of living is
an
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 strong economy of a
country
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. if a
country
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 has
a
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countinuous
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continuous
 inflation during a remarkable period of time, it is completely apparent that each individual
of
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 that society often is struggling with problems which affect his way of living.
for instance
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, rent
payment
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payments
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 and house bills, buying food, and medical treatment are
such
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 basic needs and expenditures of a
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human being
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human-being
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human being
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 that can never eliminate from our lives. in fact, these matters obviously are related to the governments and it is their
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 to solve these issues which can make people's lifestyles more
challengable
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. in order to combat
with
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these challenging situations, At
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first
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the first
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 step, policymakers should ratify policies which can control and improve the economic trend. afterwards,
government
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the government
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 must enforce those accepted policies within all parts of
the
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apply
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society. to illustrate, ordinary goods and commodities should have a stable
price
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prices
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 which
don't
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 face unreasonable changes during a constant time.
besides
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 the above facts, the government should
also
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 have plans
of
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 innovation activities and investments within the
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, from small-scale jobs to well-known companies, that can brings
such
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 significant merits like the decline of
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate. actually, a powerful
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 with
an
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 strong economy always
focus
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 on the parts and factors that affect its economic progress that generally can improve the quality of people's life. in conclusion,
economic
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the economic
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 trend of a
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 definitely has
impacts
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impact
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 on the quality of a person's life.
its
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is
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 the
government
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government's
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 obligation that provide the basic needs of individuals easily available without any difficulty.
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, the importance of a
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's
prospect
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prospects
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 in order to flourish its economy through local businesses and big companies should not be forgotten.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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