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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #houses #style #area #authorities #choice
People
 have different views on
how
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people
 should do in
free
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their free
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time
 .while some argue
that is
 crucial to do some activities that improve
mind
 during the
leisure
time
 , others believe that free
time
just
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 for resting and relaxing. eventually , I want to discuss these opposite views and give my input into the matter . In terms of
positive
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the positive
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 side
of
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using
leisure
time
 for doing activities that improve and develop the
mind
 might be the one
way
 to being a creative person. The main reason given to support
this
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claim
 is that the
mind
 will be active all the
time
 .
For example
, playing game that depends on how to
thinking
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think
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 and
dealing
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deal
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 with
situation
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a situation
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such
 as , reading books and doing
world
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word
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 puzzles .
Furthermore
 , those activities might affect
on
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the
way
 to deal with problems and
situation
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situations
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 in real life rapidly and in
smart
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a smart
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way
.
However
 , a major of
people
 believes
that is
 important to have a break and
doing
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do
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 nothing during
the
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their
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leisure
time
 . To prove
this
 point ,
the
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apply
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Humana’s brain
need
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needs
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 to rest and relax to focus again .
Moreover
 , there are
many researches
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much research
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 about
this
 phenomenon , one example to prove
this
 , they find that
people
 who managed their
time
 and divide it between working
time
 and entertainment
time
 their
mind
 more active than
who
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those who
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using
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use
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 their
mind
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minds
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 the whole
time
 . To conclude , there are many benefits of using
the
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apply
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leisure
time
on
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in
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active
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an active
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way
 and doing something
keep
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to keep
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 the
mind
 working . In my opinion, it is essential to take
some
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a
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 break and
doing
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do
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 something enjoyable
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without
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with out
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without
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 thinking so hard .
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