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Some people think the product should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making product cheap is more important.

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The market is loaded with a variety of products to choose from. While durability is the main goal for some manufacturers ,the other half focuses on making it affordable for the common man. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing how both, a longer self-life and a cheaper price make the
product
 ideal in its own way but when choosing one of them, the cost effectivity surpasses the benefits of the longevity of any given
product
. The longer lasting the goods are, the lesser the pollution caused by
waste
 generated. Every item bought, has to be discarded after it wears and tears off, expires,
loses
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or loses
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 its function, purpose or viability . If it happens too soon, the management of all the
waste
 generated can increase the load on the planet.
For instance
, due to
frequent
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the frequent
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 accumulation of
waste
 and
unavailability
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 of ways to tackle them, there is a steep rise in the number of landfills throughout the world. Durability can help
in
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significantly
reducing
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 the amount of trash generated,
hence
 lowering the burden of
waste
 management making it a sustainable option. Cheaper goods are accessible. The lesser the price, the more widespread use of that
product
 becomes possible. More and more consumers can benefit from having a cheaper,
pocket- friendly
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pocket-friendly
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 alternative.
For example
, Low cost is even more crucial for the people of developing countries where a major part of the population is below poverty life. Not every person is affluent enough to purchase an expensive item so
affordability
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the affordability
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 of products increase the domain of buyers. The main goal of the manufacturing industry should be finding a balance between price and longevity. But, affordability outweighs the fight between the two because a large number of
population
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the population
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 especially in developing countries are not rich enough to spend a fortune on the things they buy in their everyday life. In conclusion, affordability can help the
product
 to become popular, reach
door-to- door
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door-to-door
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 and benefit every person, be it rich or poor.
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