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Some say that reach countries should help poor countries with trade, health, and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

#say #countries #trade #health #education
Apparently developed
countries
 should help poor
countries
 which have trade, health, and
education
problems
. I completely agree with
this
 opinion.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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mitigating the sharp global
problems
 and sustainability of global peace. While mitigating serious issues like scarce of food in poor
countries
 reach
countries
 can expedite the solution of global
problems
 like global poverty. It is crucial to combat
the
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global poverty, food and
education
problems
,
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 because they made the lives of people a living hell.
Furthermore
, global poverty may prompt the spread of contagious illnesses and viruses like Covid-19. To cite an example, the millions of people starving in African
countries
,
they
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may it anything they see which may trigger the emergence of new types of viruses.
Otherwise
,
help
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 of potent
countries
 to poor
countries
 sustains the world’s peacefulness. In
countries
, where
development
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 of
education
low
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 levelled terrorist attacks and wars often occur. Location near
to
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hot spots is alarming for any state.
For instance
, the “Hijab revolution” is happening in Iran as the result of terrorist attacks.
That is
 why it is important to help
to
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poor
countries
 with
education
 and other aspects.
To include
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, I think that reach
countries
 should help developing
countries
 with trade,
education
 and health issues in order to tackle and prevent global humanity
problems
 which
which
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have
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far-reaching
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far reaching
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 consequences
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