Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Concerning medical
problem
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problems
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diabeses
,some people believe that food Correct your spelling
diabetes
contains
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that contains
much
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a lot of
sugar
should be sold Use synonyms
in
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at
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higher
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a higer
higer
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higher
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price
to reduce Fix the agreement mistake
prices
sugar
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consumption
cunsumption
. I personally, Correct your spelling
consumption
however
, disagree with Linking Words
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a such
opinion
, because it is not practical to decide how much Correct article usage
an opinion
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price
should Correct article usage
the price
be raises
for each product, and because the effect of Change the verb form
be raised
price
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change
chage
would be limited similar to other highly taxed commodities Correct your spelling
change
such
as Linking Words
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tobacco
tabaco
.
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tobacco
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of all, Linking Words
as
there Correct word choice
apply
are
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is
wide
range of sugary products, Add an article
a wide
and
the amount of Correct word choice
apply
sugar
contained in them differs significantly from Use synonyms
a
product to product. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, it is Linking Words
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extremely
exstreamly
difficult to Correct your spelling
extremely
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determine
determn
the method of Correct your spelling
determine
price
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adjusting
ajusting
. Correct your spelling
adjusting
For example
, cold drink Linking Words
such
as coke contains relatively much Linking Words
sugar
in the Use synonyms
ammount
, whereas the percentage of Correct your spelling
amount
sugar
is not higher as water Use synonyms
dillutes
it. Correct your spelling
dilutes
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, Linking Words
proportion
of sweet ingredients in candy is high, even though the gram of Add an article
the proportion
sugar
for each candy is Use synonyms
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minimum
minimal
minimam
. If Correct your spelling
minimal
government
taxed in accordance with the Add an article
the government
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amount
ammount
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amount
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sugar
, we could not buy seven-up at the vending machine because of Change preposition
of sugar
sharp
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the sharp
price
raising, but it is not acceptable for not only many big beverage companies, but Use synonyms
also
general consumers.
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it
can be seen in Correct pronoun usage
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cigarette
industry, Add an article
the cigarette
price
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rasing
might not make Correct your spelling
raising
a
result as expected. In spite of several tax Correct article usage
apply
increase
, smokers never stop going to Fix the agreement mistake
increases
tabaco
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tobacco
shop
because they can not quit smoking. Like nicotine in Fix the agreement mistake
shops
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tobacco
tabaco
, Correct your spelling
tobacco
sugar
has Use synonyms
addictive
effect, so Add an article
an addictive
that
people would continue to buy Correct word choice
apply
sweety
snacks despite Correct your spelling
sweet
of
significant raising in Change preposition
apply
price
or imposing Use synonyms
high
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the high
a high
tax
.
In summary, the proposal Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
of
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to
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raising
rasing
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raising
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price
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the price
for
sweets is not practical and effective. Nowadays, more and more people are caring about their healthChange preposition
of
,
and improving their diet by eating more Remove the comma
apply
protains
or vegetables. To reduce serious health Correct your spelling
proteins
protein
concern
by Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
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consumption
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the consumpiton
consumpiton
of Correct your spelling
consumption
sugar
, continual education regarding Use synonyms
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healthier
healthy
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a healther
healther
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healthy
lifestyle
is the most essential.Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
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