Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or a health club, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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way to be slim is to go to the
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club, while other
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doing daily activities
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as walking and climbing stairs is enough. From my point
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view
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both directions are right. In
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I will explain two sides of
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club
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because they have
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of being over-weighted. To have
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slim body, they should have strong discipline. Because it demands regular
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.
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of
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start their
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classes, but after some busiest working days, skip their training classes.
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result
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some think that
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walking and climbing stairs is enough to stay fit. These types of
people
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that walking
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a certain
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amount of steps
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is healthy rather than burning calories in the
gym
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they should know about
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of walking, it must be quick. Nowadays
people
tend to use elevators
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the stair
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stair
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,
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it
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has bad impacts
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health. For
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instanse
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, humans should have
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to walk more than 10000 steps to stay fit or
otherwise
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. In my opinion, going to the
gym
or
sport
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classes, walking or going up
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apply
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stairs
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should
shoul
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should
be chosen by personal abilities and properties,
wealthiness
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and type of person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cardiovascular health
  • resistance training
  • physical endurance
  • muscle tone
  • caloric expenditure
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivational factor
  • fitness regimen
  • holistic health
  • sustainable exercise habit
  • metabolic rate
  • physical exertion
  • exercise consistency
  • health maintenance
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