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Some people think that professional sports players earn too much salary, especially when they do not seem to help peopleand societies the way people of other occupations such as doctors, teachers, and soldiers do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Being a well-known and successful sportsperson is one of the most
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 professional achievements
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 by several adolescents.
This
 is due to the fact that athletes are rewarded
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 financial
supports
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.
In contrast
, it is generally held that they are not
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gaining
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those money
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 since many sportsmen seem not to be helpful to other individuals in
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society,
this
 essay partly disagrees with the aforementioned statements and provides a set of reasons to support each point of view before the conclusion is reached.
First
 and foremost,
sports
 players' actions are not enhancing the well-being of
population
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 in the way
like
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 physicians
who
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devote most of their lifetime
treating
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 their patients or teachers who
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 and
guiding
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 their pupils to seek
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vocational goals. To be more explicit, many athletes only do
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 their own interests, especially to break others' records.
Moreover
,
this
 course of action may contribute to gambling
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to
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 those watching
sports
where
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 brings about various poverty issues.
On the contrary
, it is undeniable that
sports
 play an essential role in
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 entertainment industry as we have seen many
sports
 programs
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 on the screen.
Furthermore
, people can enhance
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 satisfactoriness as well as their relationship with others while enjoying
sports
 competitions. Professional and popular
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 may inspire numerous juveniles to know their intention
of
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 life. To summarize, despite the fact that
sports
 are not having enormous direct effects on people's
life
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, there are still several positive aspects that should not be overlooked namely advanced enjoyment, satisfaction and motivation. I personally perceived that to enhance the well-being of our society, if there is no harm to others in the society, there is no doubt
the
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sports
 players should be gaining money
similarly
 to other occupations.
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