Some people think that professional sports players earn too much salary, especially when they do not seem to help peopleand societies the way people of other occupations such as doctors, teachers, and soldiers do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Being a well-known and successful sportsperson is one of the most
flavored
professional achievements Change the spelling
flavoured
wishing
by several adolescents. Wrong verb form
wished
This
is due to the fact that athletes are rewarded Linking Words
tremendous
financial Change preposition
with tremendous
supports
. Fix the agreement mistake
support
In contrast
, it is generally held that they are not Linking Words
worthy
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worthily
gaining
Change preposition
of gaining
those money
since many sportsmen seem not to be helpful to other individuals in Change the determiner
that money
the
society, Correct article usage
apply
this
essay partly disagrees with the aforementioned statements and provides a set of reasons to support each point of view before the conclusion is reached.
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First
and foremost, Linking Words
sports
players' actions are not enhancing the well-being of Use synonyms
population
in the way Add an article
the population
like
physicians Correct word choice
that
who
devote most of their lifetime Correct pronoun usage
apply
treating
their patients or teachers who Change preposition
to treating
educating
and Wrong verb form
educate
guiding
their pupils to seek Wrong verb form
guide
for
vocational goals. To be more explicit, many athletes only do Change preposition
apply
for
their own interests, especially to break others' records. Correct pronoun usage
it for
Moreover
, Linking Words
this
course of action may contribute to gambling Linking Words
behavior
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behaviour
to
those watching Change preposition
among
sports
Use synonyms
where
brings about various poverty issues.
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which
On the contrary
, it is undeniable that Linking Words
sports
play an essential role in Use synonyms
an
entertainment industry as we have seen many Correct article usage
the
sports
programs Use synonyms
displaying
on the screen. Wrong verb form
displayed
Furthermore
, people can enhance Linking Words
the
satisfactoriness as well as their relationship with others while enjoying Change the word
their
sports
competitions. Professional and popular Use synonyms
sportsman
may inspire numerous juveniles to know their intention Fix the agreement mistake
sportsmen
of
life.
To summarize, despite the fact that Change preposition
in
sports
are not having enormous direct effects on people's Use synonyms
life
, there are still several positive aspects that should not be overlooked namely advanced enjoyment, satisfaction and motivation. I personally perceived that to enhance the well-being of our society, if there is no harm to others in the society, there is no doubt Replace the word
lives
the
Correct your spelling
that
sports
players should be gaining money Use synonyms
similarly
to other occupations.Linking Words
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