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Nowadays, it has become common for students to take a gap year between school and university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Living in today’s modern world,
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 leavers are gaining a wide range of stresses.
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 is due to the competitive college admissions. Many take a lot of
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 preparing for their
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 matriculation
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 of reflecting on their professional goals. While it is general for
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 learners to take a
gap
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year
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 to find their own
interest
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 and seek out answers
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 their big questions in
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, others hold an opinion that it is a waste of
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.
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 essay discusses both positive and negative aspects of the aforementioned statement with various reasons to support each point of view before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, there are a number of advantages that
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 leavers can gain from taking a
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year
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 with, they can spend more
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to explore
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 what they really want to achieve in
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.
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, they can have more
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 to prepare for their
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 admission exams. It is
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 possible for them to spend quality
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 for recreational purposes after their years of secondary education.
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 but not least, many would like to take a
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 to advance new soft skills through informal learning that they have not been trained
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 formal education.
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, there
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 disadvantages that are concerned
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many if they have to take a
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year
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. Chief among other
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 is the belief that it is a waste of
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 to do nothing to enhance their study after
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 graduation.
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, many would argue that they can develop essential soft skills and seek their
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 purposes while taking
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 courses through extracurricular activities without having to take a
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year
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, those delaying their
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 to study
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 would feel regret for themself since most of their friends have already in
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. In conclusion, despite the fact that there are many benefits of taking a
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year
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, many drawbacks come alongside.
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, I personally believe that taking some
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 off to reflect upon their
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 purposes and values as well as to develop their skills to the fullest, there is no doubt that
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 course of action can be beneficial.
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