Due to success of convenience food and ready-made meals, we are failing to pass on adequate culinary skills to the next generation.   To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects and
boys
tend to choose science
subject
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. It is an
old school
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tendency
that is
still flourishing in our world. Gender still means too much. One century ago women were not allowed to vote in elections. Two centuries ago they can’t put on pants without permission.
Also
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a lot of people are still
thinking
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that science subjects
studied
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easier by
boys
than by girls, but now we live in another time and in another world. I know so many
boys
who can’t understand the easiest math rules. At the same
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I am a good example too
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because I am not good at literature at all. So in my opinion today everyone can choose what to do and how to
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. We should not limit ourselves. It is no progress without
broken
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this
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stereotypes. Based on all that I had said, I guess
this
tendency should be changed. Nowadays
world
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has changed. Girls can be good at physics and
boys
can be good at literature. Gender doesn’t matter.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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