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In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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There is a fact that there is an increasing number of adults
having
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 completed their education and found jobs
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 to live with their
parents
. In my opinion, even though
this
 tendency may have merits, the disadvantages
also
 are included and may overshadow them;
this
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 and give my supporting ideas for my point of view. On the one hand, it is undeniable that living with parental help contains several benefits.
First
 of all, many graduated students may be able to avoid the pressure
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 finding
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accommodation
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accommodation
 by themselves as their
parents
’
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accommodation
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accommodation
 is already available for them without any rental payment.
For example
, when a young adult
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 and
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 a new
life
 by himself, he can easily become
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homeless person because of
lack
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 of money to afford to rent a house.
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,
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support from his
parents
 may be necessary as they may provide
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shelter for him to accommodate.
However
, people who live with their
parents
 even after education may develop their mental health slower compared to the ones that live independently as adults that are
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 dependently on their
parents
 are still under
the
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observation and being taken care
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 their
parents
, which is relevant to big babies and make them
hardly
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 to be grown-up.
On the other hand
,
this
 trend comes with some more major disadvantages. Often, adults become more and more dependent on their guardians for the tasks that should have been done by themselves. They are not able to cope with
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 and social
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 without seeking
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parental help almost all the time.
This
 proves to be detrimental in their later
life
 when people are not able to manage on their own.
Furthermore
, becoming emotionally dependent and suffering from mental health issues in the future are
also
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concerns. It takes them a long period of time to learn to live on their own and adapt
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new environment because of being used to staying in their comfort zone for
such
 a long time.
This
 makes them incompetent and they are
thus
, often pushed back in the race of
life
. In conclusion, it is clear that living with family only
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 the development of individuals than helping them. So, I strongly believe that the disadvantages of
such
 a living arrangement
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 the advantages, and
thus
, more and more people should start
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 independent
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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