In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
There is a fact that there is an increasing number of adults
having
completed their education and found jobs Change the form of the verb
have
choose
to live with their Wrong verb form
choosing
parents
. In my opinion, even though this
tendency may have merits, the disadvantages also
are included and may overshadow them; this
essay will discuss both view
and give my supporting ideas for my point of view.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that living with parental help contains several benefits. Change to a plural noun
views
First
of all, many graduated students may be able to avoid the pressure in
finding Change preposition
of
a
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apply
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accommodation
accomodation
by themselves as their Correct your spelling
accommodation
parents
’ Correct your spelling
accommodation
accomodation
is already available for them without any rental payment. Correct your spelling
accommodation
For example
, when a young adult graduated
and Wrong verb form
graduates
start
a new Correct subject-verb agreement
starts
life
by himself, he can easily become a
homeless person because of Correct article usage
apply
lack
of money to afford to rent a house. Correct article usage
a lack
Therefore
, the
support from his Correct article usage
apply
parents
may be necessary as they may provide a
shelter for him to accommodate. Correct article usage
apply
However
, people who live with their parents
even after education may develop their mental health slower compared to the ones that live independently as adults that are live
dependently on their Replace the word
life
parents
are still under the
observation and being taken care Correct article usage
apply
by
their Change preposition
of by
parents
, which is relevant to big babies and make them hardly
to be grown-up.
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harder
On the other hand
, this
trend comes with some more major disadvantages. Often, adults become more and more dependent on their guardians for the tasks that should have been done by themselves. They are not able to cope with personal
and social Add an article
the personal
a personal
issue
without seeking Fix the agreement mistake
issues
for
parental help almost all the time. Change preposition
apply
This
proves to be detrimental in their later life
when people are not able to manage on their own. Furthermore
, becoming emotionally dependent and suffering from mental health issues in the future are also
the
concerns. It takes them a long period of time to learn to live on their own and adaptCorrect article usage
apply
a
new environment because of being used to staying in their comfort zone for Change preposition
to a
such
a long time. This
makes them incompetent and they are thus
, often pushed back in the race of life
.
In conclusion, it is clear that living with family only postpone
the development of individuals than helping them. So, I strongly believe that the disadvantages of Correct subject-verb agreement
postpones
such
a living arrangement outweighs
the advantages, and Change the verb form
outweigh
thus
, more and more people should start a
independent Change the article
an
life
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