Write about the following topic. Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.
In the contemporary world,
people
are working like machines and they don’t have enough time
to separate for leisure activities
. Out of the world
Change noun form
world's
population
a limited amount of Add a comma
,population
people
have time
for hobbies
. There are many reasons for this
situation and due to this
people
as well as individuals face numerous effects. This
essay will highlight the causes and the effect why
Change preposition
of why
people
neglect hobbies
.
In early
years, our ancestors had different Correct article usage
the early
pasttime
Correct your spelling
pastime
past time
activities
to live their life
to the fullest, for an instance, collecting stamps was an amateur interest however
, today Add the comma(s)
,however
this
trend have
declined and Change the verb form
has
people
no longer have hobbies
. The most prominent reason for this
is, humans are working towards money, since
the market price is rising rapidly Correct word choice
and since
people
have to compete with these prices. Due to this
society have no spare time
to participate in leisure activities
. However
another reason is thatAdd a comma
,However
,
humans are addicted to social media applications, Remove the comma
apply
where
they have made Correct word choice
and
facebook
, Change the capitalization
Facebook
instagram
their Change the capitalization
Instagram
hobbies
. For an
example, today school Correct article usage
apply
children
doesn’t
participate in sports Change the verb form
don’t
activities
, just after coming home they login
to their social media apps to play a game or search for Correct your spelling
log in
gossips
.
Fix the agreement mistake
gossip
On the other hand
, as a consequence of neglecting hobbies
, especially children
are facing numerous challenges in their life
, such
as half of the world is having high obesity rates and diabetes. Eventually
humans are falling apart from their health and they don’t enjoy their Add a comma
,Eventually
life
like in the past, due to this
society in
a whole is having depression which is a serious Change preposition
as
Add a hyphen
life-threatening
life threatening
situation nowadays. For Add a hyphen
life-threatening
an
example, according to Correct article usage
apply
a
research half of Remove the article
apply
the
Australian Correct article usage
apply
children
are facing depression and those groups of children
are not participating in any activities
.
In conclusion, I would like to mention that, we should continue what our parents taught us, so we will not face serious issues in the future. Hobbies
are invented to
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by
people
because it leads a
spare Correct article usage
apply
time
of
us to enjoy our Change preposition
for
life
even we
are having busy schedules.Correct word choice
if we
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