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Some people think that uniform is a good idea for a company. To what extent do you agree or disgree?

#people #uniform #idea #company #disgree
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Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about more and more companies
asked
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asking
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 their
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staffs
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staff
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 to wear
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uniform
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uniforms
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 at
work place
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workplace
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.
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, whether it is
a
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good thinking for employees to wear
same
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the same
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 working
clothes
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 is a controversial issue. My view is that it is good for
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company
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the company
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 to let their
staffs
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 wear
same
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the same
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 design of
clothes
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 at
work place
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workplace
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First
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, it is obvious that
uniform
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 is good for companies to improve their band. A good design
of
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uniform
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the uniform
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 can catch customers’ eyes and give a good
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 impression to customers. So
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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 will have more
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confidence
confidents
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confidence
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 to choose the service or products from
this
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company
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.
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, it is easier for
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people
poeople
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people
 to look for
a
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customer service when all
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staffs
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staff
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 are wearing
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a uniform
the uniform
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uniform
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uniforms
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, a person who
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 to buy a new phone from
apple
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the apple
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 store, once he went into the shop,
he
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will know
who
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 he should ask for a service as soon as possible.
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, customers will have a good shopping experience at the beginning.
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is not say
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 that
uniform
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 does not have any disadvantages. Of course, some
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staffs
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 do not like to wear
working
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clothes
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,
this
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 is because they think the
uniform
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 is not as comfortable as their own
clothes
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. But not everyone has the same feeling. In summary, every
company
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 should have their own
uniform
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 due to improve
their
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its
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 band power or provide a better customer
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service
series
circle
sercie
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service
. Meanwhile, some of
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the staffs
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staffs
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staff
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 may not like to wear a
uniform
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 because it is
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uncomfortable
unconformtable
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uncomfortable
. By doing so we can make sure that
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company
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the company
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 can provide their
employees
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employee's
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good
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with good
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 design and quality
working
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work
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clothes
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