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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Cities
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 offer greater employment possibilities and a higher standard of living.
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, people are moving from rural
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area
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 to urban
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area
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areas
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 for living
better
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a better
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
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, living
life
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 in a city might be quite
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challenges
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Traffic
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 and
expensive
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the expensive
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cost
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 of living is the major
challenges
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. Governments should improve public transportation and construct residential
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area
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areas
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for
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to
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reduce
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reducing
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cost
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the cost
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 of living. I will elaborate more in
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next
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the next
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 two
paragraph
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 with,
traffic
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 congestion is one of the major problem
face
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faced
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 in
urban
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an urban
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area
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areas
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. Many people faced
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 problem in their daily work
life
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 when they come
to
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apply
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home
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the home
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.
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 of
this
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, many workers arrived at their workplace late and accident may happen. There for,
government
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the government
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 should step up and improve public transport like
metro
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train
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trains
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 or local bus services so that more people can utilize
this
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 facility and
avoided
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traffic
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 congestion on road.
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, recently in
metro
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cities
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 governments
was introduce
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metro
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train
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trains
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 for transportation. It was observed that
,
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 after the introduction of
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metro
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the metro
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train
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 employees left their
car
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cars
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 at home and ride the
metro
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train
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.
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, the
second
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challenges
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challenge
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for
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of
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 living urban city of the
cost
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 of living. Due to
increase
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the increase
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of
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in
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 population because of
migration
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the migration
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 public, they face
shortage
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a shortage
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 of resident
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area
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areas
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, in urban
cities
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 housing is usually much more expensive.
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, in
metro
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cities
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 like
Mumbai
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,Mumbai
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 it is observed the
cost
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 of
two-bedroom
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a two-bedroom
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 hall kitchen flat is too
much
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apply
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high so that not
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anyone
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any one
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anyone
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 can effort to
buy
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itbuy
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, the rent of
apartment
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an apartment
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as well as
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, as well as flat,
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flat
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a flat
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 is more expensive. In conclusion, due to high
traffic
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 congestion and expensive housing
rates
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,rates
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the
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apply
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life
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 in
cities
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 is more difficult. Government should work on these two major
challenges
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 to make urban
life
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 not stressful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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