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:In some countries, fast food restaurants and companies give money to schools provided that the schools promote their products to school children. What do you think is the positive and negative of this in the development of children?

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Nowadays, companies try to earn money by using different ways of advertisement. One of them is promoting their
products
 at schools. I will try to present the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 action.
Firstly
, I want to show the positive aspect of product promotion among students. A university can use the money it received to improve conditions in the institution by purchasing modern devices or helping
children
 in their education by organising workshops or sponsoring books. That action would definitely help the
school
 to raise educated
children
 and make their efforts more pleasant.
On the other hand
,
children
 are not responsible for themselves and they have to rely on their
parents
. They do not know what is
the
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best for them.
Products
 or food promoted in the
school
 might not be good for
child's
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a child's
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 health, because of some food allergies or poor ingredients,
therefore
, they can suffer from some digestive illnesses.
Moreover
,
parents
 might not want to purchase
a
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 desired item in order to protect their
children
, which can lead to arguments. On top of that,
parents
 might not be able to afford
products
, which are advertised in the
school
 and it is difficult to
explain
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 their
child
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children
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 why
,
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 they cannot have
it
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them
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. They might not understand their
parents
' decision and they can feel worse seeing their friends with the
products
 they wanted as well. To conclude, there are positive and negative aspects of promoting
products
 in schools.
Parents
 should
be
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vary and control what their
children
 eat and use.
School
 organs,
on the other hand
, should spend the funds they received in a responsible way to help their student develop.
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