Nowdays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Nowadays social
media
is a good platform to interact
different
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kind
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of
people
all around the globe. There are many
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benefits
benifits
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benefits
of using social
media
as it is now
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as a platform to showcase one's talent and
also
helps to communicate with
peoples
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people
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having similar interests.
However
,
people
becomes
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lazy and love to sit and enjoy solitude due to excessive usage of social. In my
opinion
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the advantage of using social
media
overweighs its disadvantage and
this
essay articulates both
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advantages
adavantages
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advantages
and disadvantages in detail.
To begin
with, there are many advantages of using social
media
as it helps
to
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us to
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aware
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be aware
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about
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the
day to day
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news which in turn
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helps
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heps
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helps
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to make us
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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.
In addition
to that
people
can find out
same
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group which share same likes and dislikes.
For instance
, there are many groups are creating
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social networking sites which can showcase
talents
and creativity. So, those who have less opportunity to perform in public
during
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their
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young age can exhibit their
talents
through social
media
.
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social
media
is acting as
media
of
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for
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exchanging ideas and
talents
. There are many new
talents
are identified recently in singing who
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never been
in
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stage
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before.
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the contrary, there are many drawbacks
of
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using social
media
continuously as it makes
people
inert and unhealthy. There are many health issues increasing due to
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life of humans.
People
doesn't
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want to spend time in parks and
relatives
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home. Nowadays,
people
are finding
easy
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way
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ways
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to wish relatives and nearby cousins through social
media
which makes
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communication very less. Though there are several disadvantages, a controlled way of
usage
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the usage
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of social
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would be preferred. To recapitulate, social
media
can be used
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platform for communication and getting daily news and it must be used in a controlled way to make it fully utilised.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • mobilizing public opinion
  • sociopolitical issues
  • immediacy
  • dissemination
  • misinformation
  • cyberbullying
  • privacy invasion
  • commercialization
  • algorithms
  • excessive screen time
  • social cohesion
  • traditional media outlets
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